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Second of all, (a)digital camera is very confidence(very 담에 형용사가 와야되요..efficient). The size of it is small and method of it is very easy. So,(so나 but, and 등으로 시작하는 문장을 멋스러운 문장이 아니라고 합니다. 그래서 Furthermore,) I can get always in everywhere. If it were not for that(the reasons), I must take both ~~~~
If I planned (과거형으로 할 필요 없음)to be away from my home for a year, and I can take one additional thing(콤마안에 문장을 빼는 것이 더 고급스러움), I would like to take my digital camera. Of course, there are many kind(s) of useful thing(s), for examples(s빼기~),(a) photo camera,(a) notebook computer and (a)CD player, etc . (It is regrettable that I cannot take these all things.) (etc.는 쓰지 않는 것이 좋습니다. 차라리 and so on 아니면 아에 쓰지않는게 좋아요., 또한 괄호를 사용하는 것도 좋지 않아요, 차라리 ;이나 :을 사용하세요) But, because I can capture my appearances in everywhere and send images to my family, it’s my best useful item~~~~
If I planned (과거형으로 할 필요 없음)to be away from my home for a year, and I can take one additional thing(콤마안에 문장을 빼는 것이 더 고급스러움), I would like to take my digital camera. Of course, there are many kind(s) of useful thing(s), for examples(s빼기~),(a) photo camera,(a) notebook computer and (a)CD player, etc . (It is regrettable that I cannot take these all things.) (etc.는 쓰지 않는 것이 좋습니다. 차라리 and so on 아니면 아에 쓰지않는게 좋아요., 또한 괄호를 사용하는 것도 좋지 않아요, 차라리 ;이나 :을 사용하세요) But, because I can capture my appearances in everywhere and send images to my family, it’s my best useful item~~~~
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